Facelift for a deed

In the classic Oxford Guide to Plain English,  Martin Cutts rewrote a deed of amendment (second edition, pages 180 and 181).

Here's the original

Can you guess what issue they were amending?

Here's his rewrite

The issue and the fix are easier to spot now!

Martin uses a title, headings, consistent layout, and simpler language to get the point across.

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